User:Qaniaf/Addison Rae/TylerOliver7 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Qaniaf


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Qaniaf/Addison Rae


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Addison Rae

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hello Qaniaf, I think you are making good progress on your article so far!


 * I think you have a very strong lead in the article, it clearly outlines what the article is about. I think the final sentence in the lead is unfinished so make sure it is complete before going public.
 * I think your content addition was a good choice, many celebrities have sections showing the different philanthropical work they have been apart of so it makes sense to add this.
 * I think there is still more to add and I am looking forward to seeing how this will be fleshed out.
 * I think it would be beneficial to look at the tone of your additions. From my perspective the article is clearly written by fans of Addison and seem to put her in favorable light. I am not saying she should not be in a favorable light but on wikipedia it is important to remain neutral.
 * I would stress updating the image used in the bio and consider adding more images. Visuals can really improve the look of a article and I know there are many high quality photos of this celebrity.

Keep up the good work!