User:Qbowles/Zelda Wynn Valdes/Chriscsims Peer Review

The Lead was good and concise. It included the core essentials about her life. However, I do think that another contribution should be added in addition to just the playboy bunny suit. I understand that it was a big achievement for her especially during that time period but it kinda boxes her creativity into that one outlet, especially for the lead. It could paraphrase the later sections though. The career section is extremely thorough and complete with many details of her career. The tone is very neutral. It is not a political piece. The content of the article does include many details of her career. The overall article is great.

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