User:QueenVika2001/First Philippic/Jonathan D12 Peer Review

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Peer Review by Jonathan D12
This edit sandbox works well to expand on what the article before already had. In particular, I love the note of what a pilippic refers to during the beginning, a negative in tone, rant / tirade. This was a great addition to the article, and I think gives better understanding to someone who might not have ready a Philippic, and instead is coming here to find out what a Philippic is, rather than what the First Philippic is. As for the most obvious improvement, I think the structure needs to be worked on. The content of the article is good, but it doesn't necessary appeal to the common structure of what a Wikipedia article looks like and how neatly structured it usually is. Of course, this is only a draft, so this should be an easy edit to make. As for another improvement, I think talking about both the Athenian public response to the First Philippic as well as what the Macedonians responded to the Philippic could help. Personally, I will be adding a similar philippic description to my own article, the Third Philippic. Loved that! Overall, great work.