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= Death by Coconut - Student Edit = Link to article: Death by coconut

Summary of article:

The Wikipedia article “Death by Coconut” discusses human deaths caused by coconuts falling from trees, whole coconut trees falling on individuals and also deaths caused by coconuts blatantly being used as weapons. The structure of the page is as follows: background, documented occurrences, coconut laws, coconuts in relation to popular culture, references and bibliography. I chose this article because the information provided was relatively interesting, and I feel that if a person were to randomly stumble upon this page, they would want to read it, hence the reason why I feel it should be critiqued and potentially edited.

Strengths of the article Reason for article critique (Weaknesses)
 * Strong lead section that gives a brief overview
 * There are not any apparent biases; the writer’s thoughts, beliefs and opinions on the topic at hand are not imposed on the reader
 * The article references the majority of statements made
 * Some statements are made without supporting references
 * Some reference links are old/ do not work
 * unnamed groups/people being referenced

Edits made (2) Reasoning:
 * 1) Original: "Coconuts can cause death, typically as a result of the fruit falling from trees and striking people on the head. Following a 1984 study on "Injuries Due to Falling Coconuts", exaggerated claims spread concerning the number of deaths by falling coconuts. "
 * 2) In order for a falling coconut to indeed kill somebody, the coconut must be heavy enough and the tree it drops from must be tall enough.Documented instances of death by coconut include the following[27]
 * 1) Claim made in edit one was not referenced. New reference added.
 * 2) Claim made in edit two had a broken link. Wording/grammar. Broken link was removed, new reference added with new information.