User:Quesedillon/Pair bond/HT416 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Quesedillon


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Quesedillon/Pair_bond?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Pair bond

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead section: From the draft within the sandbox the lead doesn't look to be updated, which is okay. Although more can be added to reflect the content of a pair bond. Here the lead already established glosses over what a pair bond is and how the term is implied. More can be added that present context of the article illustrating a brief description of the article’s major sections such as; the types of varieties, the examples of human, and animal pair bonding. The lead section could also look to include brief information about unique characteristics, sexual, social, and cognitive abilities that relate to pair-bonding. It can also look to include brief information about how it plays a major role in reproduction and species survival. The ability to add more to the lead section presents opportunity to add more sub-headings. Discussing more information and detail of pair bonds allows the reader to understand the concept in more depth.

Content section: The content added to the main body of the article is somewhat relevant, as although collected from research from 2004 not much more ground-breaking information has been discovered in regards to pair-bonding. The example of voles to represent mammals presents relevant information on pair-bonding as the reader is presented with hormones and neurotransmitters that coordinate the selective behaviour, so it is of good use to the article. I believe that more content can be added to the body of the article in sections like varieties. The types of mammals that display the specific type of bond could be mentioned. A sub-heading on the types of hormone and neurotransmitters could be introduced and the biological factors that affect pair bonds can be explained in more context. If stuck on what to add, even the science and future directions of pair-bonding can be briefly mentioned.

I believe these articles will help to add information:

https://www.frontiersin.org/articles/10.3389/fevo.2019.00230/full

https://www.frontiersin.org/articles/10.3389/fpsyg.2020.02178/full

https://www.science.gov/topicpages/p/pair+bond+formation

https://www.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/pmc/articles/PMC3012750/

Tone and balance section: The tone and balance of the added information is good as it provides neutral content. There is no bias’s which is good, only an example of a type of mammal and how pair-bonds are correlated. I think that the content can illustrate more information under human pair bonding as it feels underrepresented as compared to the example section on mammals, again more specifically how their behavioural, physiological and biological factors affect how pair-bonding is determined. The article chosen displays no positions so there is no use of content added that persuades the reader, good job with that. Again, I would add more to the lead section and try to create another sub-heading, both already discussed, to demonstrate more knowledge and have a better flowing article.

Again here are some links I think will help:

https://journals.sagepub.com/doi/10.1177/147470490300100110

https://link.springer.com/referenceworkentry/10.1007/978-3-319-16999-6_99-1

Sources and references section: The references could use a lot of work, but as you go through and present more information more references will be added. Although what has been provided is a reliable secondary source of neutral content and no biased information, so good work on that! The content does accurately reflect the information retained and typed up as well as, appropriately reflect on the literature at hand. As mentioned before the reference is a little dated, so more relevant information could potentially be looked at in terms of pair-bonding and with that it will allow for a more diverse spectrum of authors and article findings. I believe that some of the links provided above present a good variety and reliability of sources from different authors so please take a look at those. The link you referenced is cited correctly and does in fact work, so that is good in terms of when you publish into the wiki article page.

Overall good job so far, the addition of the vole in the example of mammals does help with the understanding of pair-bonding and the references are properly cited, so just continue to add more detail as you go along to present a well-structured wiki article. :)