User:Quinnmac99/Frafra people/Lyola-ann Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Quinnmac99


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Quinnmac99/Frafra_people?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Frafra people

Evaluate the drafted changes
The lead section has not been written yet. Make sure to add a brief description of each major part of the article! The content added is relevant. They doubled the amount of information that was already given under most sections and made it more detailed. Going into detail about the main motifs was a good idea! Some of the content added is from 1975 and 1989 so there could be a chance that the information that has been written about these people during this time could be different or more elaborated. Maybe check to see if there are more recent writings on this information just to double check. Everything seems to be based on facts and traditions that have been around for a long time. The information under the political system, such as the three subgroups and main structures, should go more in depth. Like why do the three subgroups matter? The content added is clear and concise. I believe the geography section should move towards the top of the article so readers can picture what places and people are nearby. Also, adding information on colonialism would benefit the article. Also, I'm not sure if the terminology section adds much to the article? I think incorporating the information about “laar” would make sense though. Two small spelling errors I found: The FraFra believe in the earth as a deity, with spiritual influences that transcend it's physical form. In some places in the article its spelled “Frafra” instead of “FraFra” so just make sure the right spelling is used. And if both are right, then maybe bring that up in the lead section. And “it’s” should be “its”. All the content added has made the article so much stronger! Adding more sections on information regarding their traditions, masquerades, and differences in gender duties (if any of these sections would apply).

Good job!