User:Qzou3/Primer walking/Yadi Huo Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Qzou3


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Qzou3/Primer_walking?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Primer walking

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead

The introduction is clear and straightforward. It gives enough information for people who just want a broad view or basic knowledge of primer walking.

Content

The first few sentences are redundant with the lead section, I suggest to rephrase these sentences. I like how you put processes in several numbered steps, which makes the paragraph more concise. I think adding a picture showing the processes will make this paragraph more perfect. Also I think adding a section talking about current applications will help this article to be more well-rounded.

Tone and Balance

I think you did a good job on this one. What you added is neutral and can all be referred back to reliable resources. It's not biased and the viewpoints are not overrepresented.

Sources and References

All the sources are research articles from prestigious journals. Maybe try to add more current sources to relate the topic to the current academic research and industry field.

Organizations

The content you added is easy to read and follow. Maybe it'll be more organized if you add titles to each of you sections instead of subtitles.

Overall, I think what you added is well-written, but it still needs some work to make the article more well-rounded.