User:R123J456/Static fatigue/Veryhappybubbles! Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

R123J456


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:R123J456/Static_fatigue?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Static fatigue

Evaluate the drafted changes
The drafted changes compared to the original article definitely improves readability and understanding. The draft also took out a few instances of repetition. All content added is relevant. The lead is updated to include the new content. The lead is a bit long, but very clear and understandable.

The content added is relevant and up to date. The parts on metal embrittlement and kinetics were not copied over into the sandbox, although I'm assuming they will remain because they are mentioned in the lead. There is no bias noticeable in the content added and everything is very neutral. There are many cited sources, most of them are relatively recent and books and journals are cited, showing credibility. Additionally, all links worked when I checked. There are no images, and I believe adding 1 or more would benefit the page. I do feel like the article is more complete because there are new sections added and the quality is improved as it's more readable. My biggest critique right now would just be to add images if possible. I would also try to shorten the lead if possible. If the editor decides to keep the metal embrittlement and kinetics part, then I believe that the kinetics part especially could use a few edits to improve readability. If the editor decides to delete both parts though, then they should make sure to also delete them from the lead (although I do think both parts should stay).