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 * Concussion
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Assignment # 3

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Wikipedia Article: Concussion

1.      Proposed Change.

Old: [under the Diagnosis section]

''Concussion may be under-diagnosed because of the lack of the highly noticeable signs and symptoms while athletes may minimize their injuries to remain in the competition. A retrospective survey in 2005 suggested that more than 88% of concussions are unrecognized.''

New:

''Concussion may be under-diagnosed because of the lack of the highly noticeable signs and symptoms while athletes may minimize their injuries to remain in the competition. Direct impact to the head is not required for a concussion diagnosis, as other bodily impacts with a subsequent force transmission to the head are also causes. A retrospective survey in 2005 suggested that more than 88% of concussions are unrecognized.''

2.      Rationale for proposed change.

I have made this addition under the Diagnosis section. I believe this addition is important for a reader’s reference in recognizing a concussion, since it is often assumed that a direct impact is required for diagnosis. If an injured individual and/or primary care provider is aware that “…other bodily impacts with a subsequent force transmission to the head are also causes [of concussion],” it might help ensure proper concussion recognition and diagnosis.

The information in this statement was sourced from a review article published in the peer-reviewed, practice-improvement journal, American Family Physician. This source was published within the last 2 years and is a secondary source written by experts in the field of concussion/ general medicine.

Scorza KA, Cole W. Current Concepts in Concussion: Initial Evaluation and Management. Am Fam Physician. 2019 Apr;99(7):426-434.

3.     Area of controversy

While the proposed addition could reasonably have been inserted under a variety of headings, I have chosen to add it under Diagnosis. This is for two reasons. Firstly, I think Diagnosis may be one of the most highly trafficked sections and I believe in the importance of my addition. Secondly, the succeeding sentence discussing the under-recognition of concussions contributes to the validity of my addition.

4.     Critique of Source

The article explicitly stated that there were no financial affiliations to disclose on the part of the authors. This secondary source compiled over 35 primary and secondary articles in its development from journals and conferences worldwide.

Review articles are subject to publication bias, such that research with positive results are more likely to be published than research with negative results. This bias can manifest itself in review articles such as the one I have used as my source since the literature cited in forming the review is largely­–or perhaps exclusively–positive.

What to post on the Wikipedia article talk page?

 * This will also be covered on Nov 23rd in class. Your group should use the below template to share an outline of your proposed improvements (including your new wording and citations). Article talk pages are not places to share your assignment answers. The Wikipedia community will be more interested in viewing your exact article improvement suggestions including where you plan to improve the article (which section), what wording you suggest, and the exact citation (Note: all citations must meet WP:MEDRS)
 * You will not be able to paste citations directly from your sandbox to talk pages (unless you are interested in editing/learning Wiki-code in the "source editing" mode). We suggest re-adding your citations on the talk page manually (using the cite button and populating the citation by pasting in the DOI, website, or PMID). You will have to repeat this process yet again when you edit the actual article live.
 * Talk Page Template: CARL Medical Editing Initiative/Fall 2020/Talk Page Template