User:RAlexis13/School discipline/Elisehogan1 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

RAlexis13


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * School discipline


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
- I do think the lead is a concise description of the topic and clearly defines school discipline. I do think other aspects of the introduction paragraph may be overly detailed, and I had trouble understanding this sentence in the intro "The term "discipline" is applied to the punishment that is the consequence of breaking the rules." I also felt like the final line of the introduction didn't have a cited source that showed that the focus of discipline is changing.

- The content seems really up to date and accurately expressed the pros and cons of discipline without overt bias. I think the detail that was given was great and I like how we were able to see specific theories of school discipline. I really liked the "disparities" section but wish it was higher up in the article, though I do understand that you needed to explain discipline in depth before introducing the disparities section.

- In the Corporate Punishment section I was a little confused about where you got your statistics regarding which states permit this type of punishment. I see the hyperlinks but those just take me to the wikipedia pages of one state. I think it would be helpful to see the source where you found the details about every state. This sentence, to me, seemed like it was asserting that corporal punishment is very common in public schools today "Every U.S. state except New Jersey and Iowa permits corporal punishment in private schools, however an increasing number of private schools have abandoned the practice, especially Catholic schools, nearly all of which now ban. " It seems like the norm is to include corporate punishment but many schools are now stopping it, and I would like to see a source that says that because those are very surprising and important statistics.

- I think the restorative justice section may be better after the disparities section instead of at the very end, but I do understand why you put it there.