User:RBondy/Gender Role/Emarsh375 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Rbondy


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:RBondy/Gender_Role?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Gender role

Evaluate the drafted changes
Content


 * Hey Rachel! I think the content that you added in the "Social & Economic Consequences" section looks great! It is relatively up-to-date, clearly gender focused, and uses an intersectional lens. I'd like to see the second paragraph (where you discuss poverty) have an explicit tie to the Wikipedia topic "gender role." It is easy for us to see it as gender scholars but I think adding something like a discussion of why women's work is nonpaid or underpaid.

Tone and Balance


 * The tone that you use in your paragraphs is clearly neutral You simply state facts and represent specific groups well. The only thing I might consider changing is actually using less quotes. The only thing I might change is adding another paragraph that addresses social consequences of gender roles o being more explicit about the social consequences of the second shift and poverty.

Sources and References


 * Your information seems to be thoroughly researched. When I checked a few of the links, I saw that your description accurately represented the articles' findings. The sources you used are current to the topic and gave thorough explanations. The links that I checked worked and I did not find any sources available that might be better. I found that most of the articles you used were written by white women or groups of researchers. Additionally, your citations for references 6 and 8 (The Basic Facts About Women in Poverty) seem to be the same article/link.