User:REL9040/Aspergillus niger/Danimahoney Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

REL9040, Nathalieslebreton, Egross123, Eecc27


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Aspergillus niger
 * Aspergillus niger

Evaluate the drafted changes
I am reviewing the existing article, because the sandbox does not yet contain a full draft.

The information in the first paragraph of the lead section is stated clearly for the general reader. The second section, however, is worded awkwardly, and seems to go into details that don't belong in the introduction. The controversy over the identification/toxin production should maybe be briefly mentioned here, then expanded upon later in the body of the article.

I think the overall body of the article could be structured in a way that makes more sense. The Genetics section might go better closer to the beginning along with the Taxonomy section, as they both address characteristics of the organism itself. That would then set the foundation for later explaining the pathogenicity/diagnosis/treatments. The Cultivation section is also obviously lacking in information and sources, and may also fit better alongside the characterization of the organism.