User:REL9040/Aspergillus niger/Epicfroggz Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

REL9040 & group members


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:REL9040/Aspergillus_niger?preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Aspergillus niger

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

The lead section appears to be a good summary, except for the last paragraph: this contains information not found in the rest of the article and which would be better suited for a section within the article. The drafted content appears to be very informative and a good addition to the article. In this part: "Again, there are many microorganisms that produce CA...", I do not like the use of "Again" here, and I am also not sure where else you planned on talking about citric acid; also write "citric acid (CA)" first if you're going to abbreviate it. Drafted sources appear current and thorough, and the links work. The content/writing seems appropriate as well; I wish you placed those "Article body" sentences within the section they were going to in the draft, so you and I could compare to the live article.

Overall, I like what you have so far, your additions really bolster the Industrial uses section. Next you should try adding to the Pathogenicity section to fill it out more!