User:REL9040/Aspergillus niger/Sydneybokor Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Nathalieslebreton, Egross123, Eecc27, REL9040


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:REL9040/Aspergillus_niger?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Aspergillus niger

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead: The information added in the sandbox gives a much more detailed overview of the microbe than what was already contained in the article. I like how the first sentence of the article is separated from the rest of the article so readers know the main topic of the article at first glance.

Content: Including other species of aspergillus in the article that are comparable to the microbe at hand is a nice addition. One thing I noticed is that aspergillus niger is repeated multiple times in the draft and comes across as a bit repetitive/redundant. Try replacing it with a different pronoun or simple "this/the/etc. microbe." More background on the discovery of the microbe would also be beneficial if possible.

Tone balance: Remains neutral throughout and is unbiased

Organization: Article is overall pretty well organized. I would recommend placing the "article body" directly beneath the introductory paragraph

Images/Media: An appropriate amount of images are included and are each relevant to the article.

References: Significant number of references are included and all are from a variety of reliable sources

Overall Impressions: You all are doing a really great job and the additions so far really improve the overall quality of the article.