User:RJSteed/Abnormal psychology/Bedrum00 Peer Review

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 * Whose work are you reviewing?

RJSteed


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:RJSteed/Abnormal psychology
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Abnormal psychology

Evaluate the drafted changes
The draft you've created so far looks good! The two therapies you have added in are a crucial part of abnormal psychology treatments and I am shocked that they were not listed before.Your content is up-to-date and provides a good overview of each therapy. It might be beneficial to add in why the play therapy is controversial (in reference to this statement: "Although some what controversial, play therapy has been shown to be an effective treatment.". I do not know much about play therapy but I did not know that it is considered controversial! In the Family Systems Therapy portion, I would recommend adding in a bit about each of the three types you mention towards the end ("The treatments include family management skill development, child-parent attachment development, and family functioning improvement"). All of the information in your draft appears neutral and is clear and concise. I think it might be useful to add something into each section maybe just specifying what groups of people these therapies are used for (ex. children). I think this is a great draft and I learned a bit about both therapies!!