User:RJSteed/Abnormal psychology/Csanherz Peer Review

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In the first section of the article, the first sentence is trying to define abnormal behavior, but where it says "which may or may not be understood as precipitating a mental disorder" is kind of awkward and confusing, so maybe you could try to word it better than what is there. I would also suggest adding a sentence about therapy in the first section, so it can tie back to what you have added in the article.

I think the information you added was good and useful. I would suggest adding a little information as to why play therapy is considered "controversial", something simple and concise would work well. However, play therapy is already discussed under the "Humanistic Therapy" section, so it is kind of redundant. I would suggest splitting the "Humanistic Therapy" information into 2 sections- "Humanistic Therapy" and "Play Therapy"- and combine the information that is already there with your added information. Like so:

"Humanistic therapy (Rogers)

Humanistic therapy aims to achieve self-actualization (Carl Rogers, 1961). In this style of therapy, the therapist will focus on the patient themselves as opposed to the problem which the patient is afflicted with. The overall goal of this therapy is that by treating the patient as "human" instead of client will help get to the source of the problem and hopefully resolve the problem in an effective manner. Humanistic therapy has been on the rise in recent years and has been associated with numerous positive benefits. It is considered to be one of the core elements needed therapeutic effectiveness and a significant contributor to not only the well being of the patient but society as a whole. Some say that all of the therapeutic approaches today draw from the humanistic approach in some regard and that humanistic therapy is the best way for treat a patient. Humanistic therapy can be used on people of all ages; however, it is very popular among children in its variant known as "play therapy". Children are often sent to therapy due to outburst that they have in a school or home setting, the theory is that by treating the child in a setting that is similar to the area that they are having their disruptive behavior, the child will be more likely to learn from the therapy and have an effective outcome. In play therapy, the clinicians will "play" with their client usually with toys, or a tea party. Playing is the typical behavior of a child and therefore playing with the therapist will come as a natural response to the child. In playing together the clinician will ask the patient questions but due to the setting; the questions no longer seem intrusive and therapeutic more like a normal conversation. This should help the patient realizes issues they have and confess them to the therapist with less difficulty than they may experience in a traditional counselling setting.

Play Therapy

Children are often sent to therapy due to outburst that they have in a school or home setting, the theory is that by treating the child in a setting that is similar to the area that they are having their disruptive behavior, the child will be more likely to learn from the therapy and have an effective outcome. In play therapy, the clinicians will "play" with their client usually with toys, or a tea party. Playing is the typical behavior of a child and therefore playing with the therapist will come as a natural response to the child. In playing together the clinician will ask the patient questions but due to the setting; the questions no longer seem intrusive and therapeutic more like a normal conversation. This should help the patient realizes issues they have and confess them to the therapist with less difficulty than they may experience in a traditional counselling setting.

Play therapy involves a therapist observing a child, as the child plays with toys and interacts with their surrounding environment. The therapist plays an observational, as well as an interactional role in the intervention. This process allows for the child to enact their problems through play, and speak more comfortably with the therapist. Although some what controversial, play therapy has been shown to be an effective treatment. This therapy is also particularly useful for younger children under the age of 10, who are consciously aware of their environment. This form of treatment is important, seeing as many therapeutic interventions that are effective for adults, have shown to be less effective for children. There also needs to be more data collected to asses the usefulness of play therapy with children who are older than 10 years old. "

And in the "Play Therapy" section, you could add a sentence tying it to "Humanistic Therapy".

And overall, if you wanted to edit more of the body of the article, you could go back and reword sentences to make them more clear, because a lot of the information on this article is a little wordy.