User:RJim312/Irish Worker League/Sqe2023 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

RJim312


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:RJim312/Irish Worker League
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Irish Worker League

Lead
The lead mentions the information added about the Comintern but mostly it's a reorganization of the current version's opening statements.

The introductory sentence succinctly describes the article's purpose.

The lead does not explicitly describe the article's main sections. (Presenting the information in the order that it will appear in the article could help too)

The lead has phrasing and information that almost repeats in the first section of the article.

It is a very concise lead.

Content
The content is relevant and up to date.

There is nothing blatantly missing.

Tone and Balance
The content is neutral and not heavily biased.

Perhaps there could be a better and more detailed account of the context to the libel case and also for the Russian Oil Products depot in Dublin. A fair representation of history gives a well-rounded understanding, context in these two places would provide that.

There is no attempt at persuasion.

Sources and References
The content relies on credible sources and is truthful to their intent.

There is a great deal of articles, dissertations, and book chapters that aren't solely about the IWL but discuss it at least in the context of another issue. Reading these kinds of sources will help build a fuller view of the IWL rather than sticking with sources whose only focus is your topic.

The sources are current to the issues at hand in the context of academic historical analysis.

The sources that are used are top-notch. I would say, with the goal of contributing to the knowledge breadth of this article I would include not only the 10/10 best sources but also the 9s the 8s and the 7s. Like I said before, this will give you a clearer understanding of the history and what kind of information is circulating.

Organization
The content is a bit repetitive and the phrasing a bit sophomoric.

The phrase should be "set back" not "sent back": The communist movement was sent back by the loss of organization from the rise of the IWL.

The content is organize in a clear way but there could be a better organization of the information within each heading, a clearer fluidity of events.

Overall Impression
The content added was to the article's benefit.

Discussing parts of the intricacies of the relationship between the IWL and the Comintern was extremely beneficial in painting the complex political tableau.

More attention could be paid to the syntax along with a greater exploration of available source material.