User:Rac150/Social stigma of obesity/Ad1549 Peer Review

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Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Content - the content that has been added provides valuable insight to the knowledge about the social stigma of obesity, especially since it is a subject for a long time has been overlooked.

One detail that could be added is under the race section: "Body standards differ between black and white communities, but whiteness, and therefore thinness, is seen as the cultural norm." where the authors could explain why or how whiteness and thinness are linked socially or provide a link to a source (such as the one we read in class).

Regarding tone and balance, there is some room for nuance when talking about the medicalization of obesity: "Critics of person-first language cite problems with the desire to separate a person from that characteristic, as separating it implies that there is something wrong with being overweight, which contributes to further stigma. Furthermore, person-first language contributes to the medicalization of obesity, "

In this instance, could be acknowledged that obesity does indeed carry health risks and does at times need to be medicalized while it being concurrently true that obesity is disproportionately villainized or shamed and obese people both blamed and characterized by their weight through the framework of it being inherently bad.

The sources in this contribution are well cited and the hyperlinks provide valuable supplementary access to knowledge about the subject.

There is no image that I can see. A visual aid that could help could be problematic ads about obesity that may illustrate the widespread practice of this problematic language and imagery.

Overall, this article is well written and contributes valuable reference points to the conversation around the social stigma of obesity.