User:Rac150/Social stigma of obesity/Mirandawesley Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

C7MP, SarahLalevee, Rac150


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Rac150/Social stigma of obesity


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Social stigma of obesity

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)


 * Lead: I think the lead sentences at the beginning of the two sections are concise. They could be a bit more detailed and maybe "in a variety of different ways" could be changed to a more detailed description.
 * Content: Very relevant & extremely important! It addresses equity gaps in the fat community, and gives voice to this group discussing what they want in their language rather than outside people placing language on them. It also highlights intersectionality with the social stigma of obesity specifically among Black individuals. Content is up to date, as sources are recent and many important books and articles are referenced. I also like how they linked to an association with resources and activism.
 * Organization: This is great and the paragraphs are well-organized and good lengths in both sections.