User:Rachelchaban/Big Five personality traits and culture/Kparso11 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Rachelchaban


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Rachelchaban/Big_Five_personality_traits_and_culture?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Big Five personality traits and culture

Lead

 * the lead has been updated
 * the introductory sentence does not describe what the topic of the article is- maybe try and combine the first two sentences
 * did a great job of referencing what the other sections in the article would be about in the lead section
 * lead doesn't include info that isn't in the article


 * the lead is very concise and not overly detailed

Content

 * content added is relevant to the topic and up to date
 * missing content suggestions- in the 2nd paragraph of the controversy section, it could be helpful to talk about what the original 3 factors were, why it changed;; first paragraph of controversy- maybe explain what factor analysis is;; I think overall in the controversy section, you may be able to elaborate a little bit on the overall changes, and explain a little more why specifically people don't agree with it (for example, explain why some people believe the measures aren't accurate, what are the measures, etc.)
 * you could reference/list off/mention the other measures of personality that others use after the second sentence of the first controversy paragraph
 * in the last sentence of the first controversy paragraph, what important aspects aren't captured by the five factor model?
 * the second to last sentence in the first controversy paragraph could be made more concise

Tone and balance


 * content added is neutral
 * content doesn't persuade
 * could be helpful to add more examples of how specific cultures view the big 5 and why

Organization

 * content is organized well, content is concise, I don't see any grammatical errors

Images and media

 * n/a

Overall Impressions

 * the article is more complete and the added content improves the quality of the article
 * strengths: the lead is written very well, talks about all view points, has good citations, adds more background and clarity to the article
 * things to improve- it could be beneficial to be a little more specific when it comes to different claims made in the article and explain why people think a certain way about it, what cultures is the big 5 widely accepted and what cultures is it not, how specifically did the big 5 change over time, what the measures are, etc.