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Peer Review of First Draft

 * 1) Does the draft draw conclusions or try to convince the reader to accept one particular point of view?
 * 2) The draft gives a pretty neutral view on the subject and gives evidence that is also pretty neutral.
 * 3) Are there any words or phrases that don't feel neutral?
 * 4) There were not any words or phrases that felt heavily one-sided.
 * 5) Does the draft make claims on behalf of unnamed groups or people?
 * 6) The claims made on the abuses transgender and different gendered people suffer, along with the claims made throughout the draft are made with these people named.
 * 7) Does the draft focus too much on negative or positive information?
 * 8) The draft does focus a lot on negative information, but the topic is the risk factors of not having a binary gender and the abuse people that identify as a different gender may face.
 * 9) Are there any unsourced statements in the draft, or statements that you can't find stated in the references?
 * 10) All the statements in the draft that give information clearly found in another source are cited.

* side note: there seemed to be many spelling errors and grammar mistakes, which sometimes made the draft hard to read or follow. Also, the note at the bottom was slightly confusing, it talked about gender identity in terms of sexuality.

National Day of Remembrance and Action on Violence Against Women

On December 6 1989, Marc Lepine killed 14 women and injured ten in his fight "against feminism". This day is used to commemorate those who died and were hurt. This article lacks depth and does not have very much information, it specifically lacks information on the Marc Lepine.

Marc Lépine
Marc Lépine grew up with his mother Monique Lépine, his father Rachid Liass Gharbi, and sister Nadia Gharbi. Seventeen years after the massacre and death of her son, Monique Lépine opened up about the physical abuse that her husband used against their son when he was young. She did this not to excuse his actions, but to add to the story of how he became who he was. Later in his teenage life, his younger sister frequently made fun of him for his appearances and for never having a girlfriend, which caused him to fantasize about her death. He stated that his motives for the massacre were to fight feminists, and he had picked out feminists that he considered dangerous to society.

Marc Lépine
Marc Lépine grew up with his mother Monique Lépine, his father Rachid Liass Gharbi, and sister Nadia Gharbi. Seventeen years after the massacre and death of her son, Monique Lépine opened up about the physical abuse that her husband used against their son when he was young. She did this not to excuse his actions, but to add to the story of how he became who he was. Later in his teenage life, his younger sister frequently made fun of him for his appearances and for never having a girlfriend, which caused him to fantasize about her death. Growing up, Lépine felt that he would never become a man. He stated that his motives for the massacre were to fight feminists, and he had picked out feminists that he considered dangerous to society.

The massacre that Lépine committed was both murder and a suicide; the massacre was notably committed due to his suspected hatred of women, but both the suicide and massacre may have been committed due to his hatred of men and fear of never being manly enough. Helen Morrison, a psychiatrist who specialized in handling serial and mass murderers, argued that the massacre was committed more because Lépine was struggling with his inner demons rather than strictly due to his hatred of women. However, many feminists believe that it was a targeted attack against women since he made the men leave the classroom, threatening them with his weapon if they did not leave. Furthermore, before opening fire, Lépine yelled "J'haïs les féministes" or "I hate feminists."

Lépine's actions have inspired Men's Rights activists even years after his suicide. In 2014, an email that was sent to Utah State University, threatening to shoot up the school, praised Marc Lépine for being a "hero to men everywhere for standing up to the toxic influence of feminism on Western masculinity." Even after his death, Lépine holds a legacy among his followers.

Changes made for my final draft
For my final draft, the category "Marc Lépine" would be added to Wikipedia article "National Day of Remembrance and Action on Violence Against Women." I felt that it was necessary to add in a category explaining who the man in charge of the Montreal Massacre, in order to give some more insight on what happened and what was possibly going on in the killer's head. In my final draft I briefly talked about Lépine's childhood, and how his father and sister possibly played a role in how he felt about himself and subsequently led to his decision to commit mass murder. I added in a section briefly explaining that it was both a massacre and a suicide, and what the two opposing sides feel about why Lépine committed the act. Finally, I gave an example of how Lépine's legacy lives on today through some Men's Rights Activists.