User:Rachelscarseth/Woman Hater/Shadycedars Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Rachelscarseth, Levi.roske, Kyliemackedanz


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Rachelscarseth/Woman_Hater?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Your draft is very well written. You've got a solid history of the term, and your discussion of socialization and gender roles helps support and explain how the term manifests in our lives and how societal pressures uphold those norms. Some things that caught my eye - you have an image of a graph showing "common risk factors." It isn't inherently clear exactly what the the graph is showing risk factors for. I would tie the graph to a section of the article if you intend to keep it. On the history of the term - Swetnam seems to be the original source detailing misogynistic views, and thus is important to include. Mark Twain's letter, while a very interesting anecdote, does not seem to hold the same historical sway. If you keep it, I would find more similar examples to group it with. Otherwise, I would consider cutting it (or finding a different way to express Twain's sentiments). Lastly - you have picked a topic that, while incredibly incredibly important, is very difficult to write neutrally about. While I agree with everything you have written, the tone you take is persuasive, and you attack the ideology of woman-haters. Again, I agree 100% with what you have, but based on what we've been told about how Wikipedia articles should be written, I think you need to reevaluate what you've written through a more impartial lens. Or, find a way to say what you have in a more "neutral" voice. Back up every claim with a citation, and evaluate every citation you use. People will be very eager to pick apart your work once it's published due to the nature of this topic. Again, very well written, and great job tackling this subject area. Kudos to you all.