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Article Evaluation:
Introduction:

The opening sentence should serve as a definition for the article. In this case, the Holocene Glacial Retreat seems to be described in a slightly wordy manner. Upon editing this article I would suggest a more simple explanation or separate the thought into two separate sentences such as: The Holocene glacial retreat is a geographical phenomenon that involved the global deglaciation of glaciers. These glaciers had previously advanced during the Last Glacial Maximum in the years of _____ and _____. The second and third sentence referring to the time periods are both in need of citations for verification.

In general, there are some areas where I think a comma or slightly different wording would be beneficial to the structure of this article. For example, in the introductory paragraph, sentence #3 I would replace the word "starting" with "started" and "resulted" with "resulting" to provide a more fluent sentence. I would also change, "of North America..." to "in North America" to avoid repetitive wording.

The tone of this article is unbiased and the author does not seem to have any personal stakes in the writing of this article. Although, there is one or two sections where it appears the author has drawn some of their own conclusions from the research done by others.

Information relevance:

Upon reading this article, the information appears to be relevant to the topic at hand as many different areas of the globe are examined and provide scientific evidence of glacial retreat during the Holocene.

The Antarctica and New Zealand sections of the article appear to be underrepresented compared to the North America and Europe sections. I would suggest finding additional information for these two subheadings, or to reevaluate if they should be included.

In the North America section of the article the first two sentences are in need of a citation to avoid plagiarism.

When referring to Europe, the first sentence addresses a time period that has not previously been mentioned in this section and should be provided. A citation should also be present for this information.

In the New Zealand section, the last sentence includes an assumption/prediction of what may occur in the future with no scientific bearing, therefore this should be excluded.

Overall, the article is relatively short in length and a conclusion paragraph could be added to wrap it up in a more professional manner.

Upon reviewing the bibliography used for this article I found that all of the resources used were reliable academic journals with the exception of citation #6 which cannot be located through the link and may be out of date. Therefore, upon editing this article I would suggest finding another reliable source to support the information that was cited from this website as otherwise it would be considered plagiarism.

The talk page addresses how the time period should be noted as post Pinedale Glaciation as the time period given seemed to be unclear.

This article is currently rated as a Stub class article and is WikiProject Glaciers in order to bring the article quality to a higher level.