User:Rain.noakes/Parks Canada/Juliabon123 Peer Review

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Quote: "the idea of conserving nature unimpaired has been part of national parks’ legal mandate since 1930. The term “ecological integrity” was put into the 1988 amendments to the National Parks Act but was in park policy as early as 1979” 23 (Panel on the Ecological Integrity of Canada’s National Parks, 2000).

Comment: I don't think its necessary to put the in text citation when you

Quote: For example, "[ecological integrity]has a high degree of linguistic elasticity

Comment: Put a space between '[ecological integrity]' & 'has'

Quote: For example, “The 6 to8 ecological integrity indicators for each national park measure the health of Canada's national parks by reporting on the indicator’s condition and trend

Comment: Put a space between '6 to' and '8'

Quote: This is a notable improvement, considering that in 2000, 54% of parks were suffering some form of major or severe ecological stresses. In 2018, there are 12 ecosystems rated as poor, 20 EI indicators in decline, particularly forests and freshwater environments.

Comment: Make sure you have it written somewhere what EI stands for

Comment: Relevant content and neutral tone throughout. Good addition to the material already on the page