User:Rakmal1/Jack Diamond (architect)/Qiaochu.zhang Peer Review

Peer review
This is where you will complete your peer review exercise. Please use the following template to fill out your review.

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing? (Rakmal1)
 * Link to draft you're reviewing: User:Rakmal1/Jack Diamond (architect)

Lead
Guiding questions:


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer? Yes
 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic? Yes
 * Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections? Yes
 * Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article? No
 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed? It is concise, and suitably introduces an individual architect.

Content
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic? Yes
 * Is the content added up-to-date? Yes
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong? No

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added neutral? Yes
 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position? No
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented? No
 * Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another? No

Sources and References
Guiding questions:


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information? Yes
 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic? Yes. The projects have only one or two references per description, but this could be sufficient since the projects are not the main focus of this page on his life.
 * Are the sources current? Yes
 * Check a few links. Do they work? Yes

Organization
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read? Yes
 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors? There are several grammatical errors and spelling errors. Text should be reviewed for proper verb tenses. Also, review the dates/years mentioned (birth date is stated as two different days)
 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic? Yes

Images and Media
Guiding questions: If your peer added images or media


 * Does the article include images that enhance understanding of the topic?
 * Are images well-captioned?
 * Do all images adhere to Wikipedia's copyright regulations?
 * Are the images laid out in a visually appealing way?

For New Articles Only
If the draft you're reviewing is a new article, consider the following in addition to the above.


 * Does the article meet Wikipedia's Notability requirements - i.e. Is the article supported by 2-3 reliable secondary sources independent of the subject?
 * How exhaustive is the list of sources? Does it accurately represent all available literature on the subject?
 * Does the article follow the patterns of other similar articles - i.e. contain any necessary infoboxes, section headings, and any other features contained within similar articles?
 * Does the article link to other articles so it is more discoverable?

Overall impressions
Guiding questions:


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete? Yes
 * What are the strengths of the content added? The article is a more comprehensive outline of Jack Diamond's life, and ties this strongly into his well known firm. It gives examples from published articles that supports and gives a complete view of his career and design approach.
 * How can the content added be improved? The grammatical errors should be fixed. The writing style maintains neutrality very well, however, phrasing sometimes sounds choppy.

Overall evaluation
A lot of important information has been compiled and added to the original page which gives a much more complete picture of the individual. There is a variety of information taken throughout his life and a few key projects from his career, which allows the reader to gain an understanding of its progression and development. Many sources have referenced the Diamond Schmitt Architect website, however, most of the content taken from there is factual and objective details.