User:Ramen Scientist/sandbox

Week 2: Article Evaluation
I chose the Lamprey article, and some things I found that need some evaluating is some citations. They state that "taxonomists" have stated something but have no source to backup the claim. Along with some run-on sentences such as what synapomorphies are. I believe they can shorten that paragraph a little better. Also another part that can be misleading is the paragraph where it talks about pests. They state that "It is generally believed" and it may seem like a biased hypothesis. According to the talk page people are confused about its classification and I can kind of see an issue on how the paragraph is worded.

Week 3: Plagiarism & Bad Sources
Poor sources may include: blogs, press, company’s websites. This is due to having biased opinions and not being neutral when it comes to topics. Some other sources that may also do this can even be news articles. The difference between copyright violations and plagiarism is that copyright violation is taking work that cannot be utilized. While plagiarism can be poorly citing resources and rewriting work that is very similar to the original work. Some good techniques to avoid this is to make sure you understand what is being stated and then restating it in your own words, as if you were the one teaching the topic.

Week 4: Bat Articles
- One of the articles that can be modified would be Bat flight. More can be added into the evolution segment as how bats came to attain their wings. A part that could be edited out is the mention of the 2011 study. More can also be put in for the anatomy of the wing overall since the page only gives brief description of the evolution and morphology.

- Another article that can be revised is the Bat page, since there is no information about the makeup of the bat such as tissues. But that will be challenging to modify since it is a featured page therefore most of the information should be solid.

-Lastly the Mammal page would be an option as well. Since bats are the only flying mammals, it already does have an aerial paragraph. But more could be added behind this but it is necessary to first compare and contrast different pages to see what has not been mentioned already.

Week 5: Bat Edits
Bat flight : I want to add more onto what tissues are necessary in order to allow bats to fly. But after more investigation I have realized that the tissue is already spoken about in the Bat article under Wings and flight. I was thinking of possibly linking this section within the bat flight article.

Add some images into this section as well. A challenge I have come across that I want to get answered before editing is how to add my own photos since I took some of the wings and muscles inside, I would need to take closer images of the tissues.

Bat : As mentioned before this article already mentions bat tissues needed in order to fly. So I would just need to fact check the information.

- Fibers: Although, I did come across a source of how the wings being made of skin helps with locomotion. It has interested me and I want to see what new information this source can give me.

Mammal : This page gives a great overview of the bats flight ability since it is the only mammal to be able to do so. It is very unlikely that I will find any grand changes to make.

Here are a list of sources I found to compare the pages to:

- Different information about bats is given such conservation context.

- Describes how bats fly.

- Describes the makeup of bats wings.

Week 6: Continued Bat Flight Edit
I believe that the Bat does a well job summarizing the different type of tissues, but the bat flight page lacks this. If I was looking for information about how bats wings work for flying I would first look at the bat flight page. If a new section was made within it that allows the audience to find information easier that would be beneficial. But I would want to know if this can be done this method or if it needs to be done differently.

NOTES:

Connective tissue are an element of the wing's morphology

Things to consider:


 * 1) What type of connective tissue is it (citation) and links to Wikipedia pages about that tissue
 * 2) Why is that tissue important?---functional? (citation)...maybe other links

Where to add:

"
 * 1) Under Adaptations for flight in Bat Flight
 * 2) Or add to the wings and flight section of Bat
 * 3) Original text: " The patagium is an extremely thin double layer of epidermis; these layers are separated by a connective tissue center, rich with collagen and elastic fibers. The membrane has no hair follicles or sweat glands, except between the fingers.
 * 1) Revision: Therefore the bat wing consists of both an external epidermis and an internal layer of dermis.
 * 2) Revision: Some bat species may have microscopic hair located on their membranes.

To find more information about what type of tissues are needed for bat flight, visit the Bat page.

Or could I somehow attach the page to the new section.

User:Ramen Scientist/Bat Flight

Week 11: Drafting

 * 1) Revision: Therefore the bat wing consists of both an external epidermis and an internal layer of dermis.
 * 2) Revision: Some bat species may have microscopic hair located on their membranes.
 * 3) The bat wings being made up of connective tissue assists with flexibility.

Week 12 & 13: Finishing Final Draft
Summary plan: I plan on revising part of the original Bat page. In which one part specifically discusses how there is no hair located on the batwing. Which is not true for all bat species. I plan on providing an image for to also demonstrate this. The other part I hope to add onto is the importance of why the bat wings makeup helps with the function for bats. As for the Bat flight I hope to add additional images to demonstrate what the page discusses. Along with linking the Bat page so readers can find more information easily.

- Bat flight: Adding under the first part of introduction


 * Revision: "Furthermore, bat wings are made up of connective tissue in order to complete these tasks."
 * Or "In order to complete these tasks bat wings are composed of connective tissue and other structures".

- Bat: Additional revision to previous work:

3. Revision: Due to the membrane being made up of connective tissue this assists with durability and flexibility for the bat wing. Additionally there are healing properties for the bat wing.

4. Original text: "The skin on the body of the bat, which has one layer of epidermis and dermis, as well as hair follicles, sweat glands and a fatty subcutaneous layer, is very different from the skin of the wing membrane. The patagium is an extremely thin double layer of epidermis; these layers are separated by a connective tissue center, rich with collagen and elastic fibers. The membrane has no hair follicles or sweat glands, except between the fingers."

Revision: "Although, in some bat species the wing membrane does contain hair follicles". (Reliable citation)

Further revising caption: What is the importance of the image?

Final Draft
Bat Flight:

"These muscle groups act to power flight and utilize the plagiopatagium which is the skin overlapping the forelimb, similar to the skin on species of flying squirrels."

This skin is composed of elastin fibers along with connective tissue. Furthermore, providing durability and flexibility for the bat to lift itself easily. More specifically the wing membrane is called the patagium. Its tissue makeup depends on the region of the patagium.

The skin located on the bat wing called the patagium, is composed of elastin fibers along with connective tissue. Furthermore, providing durability and flexibility for the bat to lift itself easily.

Bat:

The membrane does not contain sweat glands except in (between the fingers). The presence of microscopic hair follicles on the membrane varies on the bat species. This supports the bat with the ability of flight. The bat utilizes the hair follicles in order to adjust sudden flight maneuvers.

"The patagium is an extremely thin double layer of epidermis; these layers are separated by a connective tissue center, rich with collagen and elastic fibers. The membrane has no hair follicles or sweat glands, except between the fingers. "

Research:
interstitial structures: inner organs (muscles and circulatory systems) for the tissue it is found within digestive, urinary and respiratory systems.

To do:

In some species there are sweat glands present in between the connective tissue while in others it is not... (revise this)

Find Marian Turner paper

Discuss on how the tissue makeup depends on region of patagium and link to to patagium wikipedia article

Discuss the different sweat glands and apocrine glands located between epidermis

Final Revised version:
Bat - Depending on the bat species the presence of hair follicles and sweat glands will vary in the patagium. This patagium is an extremely thin double layer of epidermis; these layers are separated by a connective tissue center, rich with collagen and elastic fibers. In some bat species sweats glands will be present in between this connective tissue. Furthermore, if hair follicles are present this supports the bat in order to adjust sudden flight maneuvers.

Bat Flight - The skin located on the bat wing called the patagium, is composed of elastin fibers along with connective tissue. Furthermore, providing durability and flexibility for the bat to lift itself easily.