User:Ramirezd2/Capacocha/Neil Givens Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

User:Ramirezd2


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Ramirezd2/Capacocha?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Capacocha

Evaluate the drafted changes
Declan, your section on Quehuar for the Capacocha Wikipedia page is really well done. You thoroughly cite your sources and do a great job of using neutral and balanced language in your descriptions. Still, I think there are aspects that your could improve. I think that you should make use of Wikipedia's linking feature that lets you turn a word or phrase into a link to another page. Some of the language used is a little above what might be known by the average reader, so linking the associated page might help make the writing a little more accessible. Some words I think would be beneficial to link are camelid, cumbi clothes, ushnu, spondylus shell, and maybe DNA analysis. Wikipedia has pages on almost everything you can think of, so I encourage the use of this helpful tool.

Another aspect that I think you could improve is the geography of the section. Many Wikipedia pages have very specific descriptions of geography to help orient the reader. You mention several places in your section, but only describe the location of one site very briefly. I think that what you currently have is fine, but you could elevate the section by adding more detail. You could look into inserting one of those Wikipedia maps that has the coordinates and the dot on a map of the exact location, although that might be over the top. I also wonder if in the long term this page should be rearranged to just have a list of locations of archeological capacocha sites, with each site having its individual page. This is probably too much for you to do, but it is something to keep in mind in designing your section and edits to the page. Overall I think that your work is excellent and that you added a high quality section to an interesting Wikipedia page.