User:Rango122/Abortion in the Dominican Republic/Arichy02 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?
 * Graceland2, Ptreehlknie, Rango122


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://docs.google.com/document/d/1xqoVHO__5QeGxW-pM5gSOx1rOSe3DBfTewpQvwz1KzA/edit#
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Abortion in the Dominican Republic

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead:

The lead section reads a little long and in depth. The paragraph that starts with "this phrase has complications" implicates authors' perspective on the issue or belongs in the "Law" section of the article. The mention of Dr. Milton Cordero also seems out of place and his role in the Dominican Republic needs context. Overall, we found that the lead did not provide an effective preview of the rest of the article and needs more breadth and less specifics on the issue of abortion.

"Laws"

The law section could be shortened and divided into other sections. For example, the paragraph that starts with "However, there have been movements to amend the Dominican Constitution to decriminalize abortion" seems like it might fit better in the pro-choice movement section. There is also language in this section such as "sadly" and "will only provide" that adds opinion to the section.

"Pro-choice/pro-life"

It is little unclear if you are keeping all of the old information. If your group is, the pro-choice section is significantly longer than the pro-life section, creating an imbalance in coverage. The information in these sections reads mostly free of opinion (remove "hope" from pro-choice section) and

"Further criminalization"

This section does have relevant and good information, but we think it could either be absorbed into or made a sub-section of the "laws" section.

"Economics of abortion/Esperancita"

These two sections also contain relevant information, but are both relatively short. Consider combining them into a single section maybe titled "impacts of abortion laws/criminalization."