User:Raquel Gilliland/Planktivore/Hugheann Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Raquel Gilliland


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Raquel%20Gilliland/Planktivore?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Planktivore

Evaluate the drafted changes
The lead section is concise and presents a good arch of the article. The lead could mention that the article discusses planktivory across ecosystems and in the context of climate change, but doesn’t contain any redundant or irrelevant information. Generally, the article contains a lot of good content relevant to the topic, although there is some redundancy in information within the first few sections that could be eliminated through reorganizing how the information is presented.

The tone of the article remains neutral throughout and does a good job of presenting an unbiased viewpoint. However, sections aren’t equally represented. For example, the bulk of the article focuses on Planktivory across ecosystems and the impacts of climate change on planktivorous organisms of different ecosystems but does not expand upon harmful algal blooms, seasonal variation, or effects on industry. Some of these sections could maybe be reordered or organized in order to give equal space to explore each viewpoint.

The references appear to be from a variety of sources, since this is a new article be sure to include 2-3 secondary sources as well. The citations appear to be correct, although a few more recent articles could be included if possible to ensure content is up to date. Additionally, there are some statements not directly supported by a citation in the first few paragraphs of the ‘Forms of Planktivory section’, ‘Mechanics of Planktivory’, and ‘Climate Change Effects on Planktivores in the Tropical’.

Regarding organization, the structure of the article is a little unclear. I think the article could benefit from discussing planktivory in a more general context to start, discussing food web dynamics and controls, nutritional characteristics, and seasonal variation, then progressing to discuss invertebrate and vertebrate planktivorous organisms. The middle section which analyzes different ecosystems contains a lot of great content but could be more effective by focusing on a smaller subset of ecosystems. Additionally, this section contains sub headers on food regulation although the section header states an exploration of ecosystems. Additionally, the climate change section contains a lot of information for each ecosystem but I think this section would be more effective if it was more focused on general climate impacts rather than attempting to capture all change in all ecosystems. Effects on industry could also be included in the climate change section to demonstrate the value of these systems and how they are at risk in the face of a changing climate.

Overall the article contains a lot of great information but the organization could be improved to better reflect the focus on the article and give equal space to each viewpoint. There are also some sentence structure errors and grammatical errors but that is understandable since this is a draft. Additionally, the lead could be expanded to include a sentence about food web dynamics, ecosystem differences, and climate change impacts of and on planktivorous organisms.