User:Raquel Gilliland/Planktivore/Kellyshan31 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Raquel Gilliland


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Raquel%20Gilliland/Planktivore?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes

 * "Titanichthys was the first massive vertebrate pelagic planktivore"- first to be discovered?
 * The lead looks good to me!
 * "and can be used to infer potential consequences of climate change on the distributions of large planktivorous vertebrates like leatherback sea turtles" a bit unclear here how they can be used to infer the consequences of climate change.
 * Great information in the Gizzard shad in the forms of planktivory section but it seems like some of the sentences go un-cited when they may need citations.
 * Same with the third paragraph of "Forms of planktivory", it seems like a lot of those sentences need to be cited at the ends.
 * Could probably explain what "ambush predators" in a sentence.
 * Facultative planktovores were mentioned twice. This could possibly just be mentioned once as to avoid repetition, or alluded to more subtly.
 * "Planktivorous seabirds can be really instructive to scientists"- omit "really"
 * In "Mechanics of Planktivory" there seems to be some missing internal citations.
 * The planctivory in ancient systems is a super cool section! Maybe a bit more information in this section?
 * The gizzard shad is mentioned many separate times, and is a bit repetitive.
 * The sentence under "Climate Change" looks like it needs a citation.
 * Make sure that CO2 is subscripted.
 * Probably could link a wiki page or website to the Oscillating Control Hypothesis.
 * "permanent ice is becoming less and less"- sounds a little informal.
 * The last two sentences of "Climate change effects on Planktivores in the Arctic and Antarctic" seem like they should be cited.
 * The second sentence of "Climate change effects on Planktivores in the Tropical" needs a citation. The title of this also seems incomplete.
 * Wiki link to Zooxanthellae?
 * "Climate change has had significant impacts on coral reefs, with warming causing coral bleaching and increases in infectious diseases, sea-level rise causing more sedimentation that then smothers corals, stronger and more frequent storms causing breakage and structural destruction, an increase of land runoff bringing more nutrients into the systems causing algal blooms that murk up the water and therefore m=diminish light availability for photosynthesis, altered ocean currents causing a difference in the dispersal of larvae and planktonic food availability, and lastly changes in ocean pH decreasing structural integrity and growth rates (NOAA)."- really great information here but can be split up into multiple sentences and needs citations.
 * "levels.Climate change"- is there meant to be another sentence here?
 * Make sure to italicize all Family, Genus, and Species names.
 * The first paragraph of "Effects on Industry" looks like it could use more citations, especially when displaying a numerical value, like "238 million".
 * Really enjoyed reading the section, it was very interesting!!