User:Raquellegher/Maria Teresa Silveira de Barros Camargo/Calenjanesky Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

raquellegher and anjelyaragon


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Raquellegher/Maria Teresa Silveira de Barros Camargo
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead: I think that your opening section of "Early Life" is good. I know that there might not be a lot of information on your person, but you could possibly talk about her early life(i.e. where she grew up, was her family rich, etc.) I would also talk about how she was a mother in this section, instead of the career section.

Content: I think that your content is very good and talks about exactly what we are meant to be talking about with this project. However, it seems like you could expand more about what she did and what she advocated for; you say she was an activist, but you don't say explicitly for what. You say the word "revolution"; I would expand on that and talk about what politics were happening in Brazil at the time, to make her so politically involved. I do not think that you overrepresent one view, as it seems pretty straightforward. Nice job!

Sources: Right now, I do not see any sources, so make sure to get 2-3 and cite them before turning it in!

Organization: I think that it is organize very well and is very concise, which is good. One spelling error, I think you forgot to capitalize Brazil in the first sentence under "Early Life". Other than that, everything seems good and organized.

Images and media: You don't have any images right now; if you can, it might help the article, but I don't think that it is bad without any images.

Overall impressions: I think you did a really good job! The article tells a lot about what she did, which I had no idea about before reading it. I think that if you can find more information on her personal life, that could be helpful. In addition, if you could link other Wikipedia articles to your page, so that people could learn more, that would be a nice touch. (possibly about her husband's printing shop or city of Limeira in the state of Sao Paulo?) Overall, good job!