User:Raquelroro/Qashani/Ccreadingtime Peer Review

General info
Raquelroro
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Raquelroro/Qashani?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Qashani

Evaluate the drafted changes
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Lead: The lead that has been composed compared to the original massive one paragraph on the page of Qashani tilework is much more organized, regardless of its shorter length. The editor has included an introductory sentence stating the purpose of Qashani tilework that allows for the remainder of the article to explore this topic at greater length. The lead does not contain a representation of what may be included in later subsets of the article, however, the lead is concise and not overly worded as it was before the peer edit.

Content: When reviewing the added information in terms of its adequacy, relevance, and historical representations I couldn't find anything that would stand out as particularly unethical or incorrect, there does not seem to be any biased information however I would think it would be rather difficult to find bias on the topic of Qashani, making coverage of this topic fairly simple in terms of locating its history and relevance to Islamic arts.

Tone and Balance: The content added seems to have been checked by 5+ sources and is fairly unbiased, there is no information that is added that would suggest bias towards any particular position in the history of Qashani, and there is no persuasion being used to guide the reader into thinking one particular thing.

Sources and References: It appears that all of the information added to the wiki article is backed by sources, however they are not added in the source particular way that wikipedia requires, i.e [2] or within brackets. The sources are mostly accessible through free libraries on the internet, but I cannot find the first one with the APA formatting provided. The sources are diverse, and are all based around the topic required.

Organization: although the additions are relatively short they are extremely vital for the structure of the article. A look at the previous edition of this wiki article will show you that the information provided was in one massive block of information. However, the user editing this page has actually added structure to the wiki article, as well as adding some form of timeline structure to the change of the Qashani through the 16th and 18th century.

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I throughly believe this editor has done a great job not only restructuring the article, but has also done a formidable job at making the article accessible to people new to this information. The structuring as well as the references are easy to find and easier to navigate, and the page isn't a ridiculous size that may deter a reader from gathering the information that they need.