User:Rashaaasfour/Gruinard Island/JacobWhite28 Peer Review

General info
User:Rashaaasfour
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Rashaaasfour/Gruinard Island
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Gruinard Island

Evaluate the drafted changes
This is a great start for your contributions to the Wikipedia article and I think the section on sheep contracting anthrax from eating grass contaminated with from the deceased bodies of other mammals, however I think more clarity or precise language is needed in order to properly implement it in the article as the link between Louis Pasteur and the biological warfare attack needs to be more clearly separated or at least clarified as I believe he died in 1895, long before the events of World War 2 and it is made to seem as if he contributed that theory right after the events of Gruinard Island. I also think it would be a good addition to the article to talk about the emerging dark tourism industry on the Island and kind of the cultural view of the disease, with what perceptions are currently existing both locally and globally. Giving an update on the relocation of the intertidal organisms to would also be nice to include as the source in the current article is from the year 2000 which is a bit outdated at this point and is about to turn a quarter century old. Also you can either remove or add on to the sentence relating to sheep being added to the island and remaining healthy, it seems a bit out of place and is a bit disconnected from the rest of the paragraph relating to decontamination and is just sitting in the middle of the section. Overall you are off to a great start and have already made useful contributions to the article, just need to tighten up your sentences as well as elaborate on some more topics.