User:Rcantoin/Exploitation of women in mass media/Michelle13712 Peer Review

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 * Whose work are you reviewing

Rcantoin


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 * User:Rcantoin/Exploitation of women in mass media


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Exploitation of women in mass media

Evaluate the drafted changes
Your added content seems very relevant to the topic and current. Your article deals with a defined equity gap.

Your content does not seem neutral. Perhaps you could look for sources that argue the other side of your argument to balance it out. As it is written right now, it seems to be trying to persuade against certain images instead of presenting evidence of varying viewpoints.

Your sources are good and diverse. You may want to cite them more often or add some more.

Your content seems pretty clear, but you may want to work on organization of ideas as you develop your article. Be careful of changing tenses in your statements.

I believe your changes will enhance this article. Your inclusion of supposedly pro-woman images that create division is timely and effective.