User:Reaelise13/Haemophilus influenzae/Antonellaaliste Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Users: Reaelise13, Raf19275, and Secretly a power ranger 2


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Reaelise13/Haemophilus_influenzae?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Haemophilus influenzae
 * Haemophilus influenzae

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead

The article does look up to date with the first sentence from the new content. It seems like they still need to update the second.

The lead from the wiki article seems to lack some information on the major sections of the article. It mainly focuses on the reason behind its name rather than information about the bacteria itself. This lead could be improved by adding some more information on the bacteria and adding in some information on what the other sections in the article covers. Some of the wording can be improved on the edits made by the previous author(s).

Content

The content under the major sections of the articles seem up-to-date, especially after reviewing over the references. The only place I thought needed some more information was the "Disease" section. It has a good start on describing symptoms but I feel like it could include more details on where the disease is most prevalent, who is the most affected by the disease, information on the history of this diseases, etc.

Looking through the guiding question for the peer review, it seems to me that everything seems neutral, information is up-to-date, images are captioned and appealing to the reader, I do not see any obvious grammatical mistakes, and references work and consist of recent, scholarly references. Like I said earlier, the "Disease" is all I would really focus on adding more specific and useful information for any reader wanting to know more about the disease and the lead could be improved by adding more information about the sections in the article.