User:Reaelise13/Haemophilus influenzae/REL9040 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Reaelise13


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Haemophilus influenzae - Wikipedia

Peer reviewing the original article since there is little to no information in the sandbox


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Haemophilus influenzae - Wikipedia

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Suggested Edits
For the sandbox, I do not believe you need both a reference list and citation list. All citations should be under a section titled "References"

Lead
First sentence is missing a citation.

The first sentence also throws too many scientific words at the reader. Maybe break it down some and give those words context.

I don't suggest using the phrase "argued by some" because who is that referring to?

Content
There seems to already be quite a bit of content written which means its either not accurate or there is enough information available to extend some of the sections. I would definitely cross reference some of the information with the sources and verify its accurate and not just working theories.

Tone and Balance
I thought the tone remained neutral and unbiased throughout the article

Sources and References
Some of the original references are blogs or internet searches about the microbe. I suggest finding scholarly articles or journals to replace these. An example would be source 7 which cites Medscape.

Otherwise, there are a fair number of citations to begin with and should only grow as you add more information.

Organization
Make sure the section headings are all the same. Is there a reason why some of the headings are boldened rather than underlined which separates the sections?

I might start with the sections "HIB Infection" and "Diagnosis" prior to "Serotypes." There should be a flow through the sections. Either all the human infection information should go first or after the information that described the microbe.

Images and Media
Tons of pictures, definitions, and hyperlinks to related articles which is good.