User:RebLAHIS/Feminist Performance Art/Lianawongg Peer Review

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 * Feminist performance art

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Hello, this is Liana:) Thank you for this article, Yoko Ono’s “Cut Piece” is for sure a very important and significant piece when it comes to gender violence, and I think it has showcased that male gaze through the actions and performances of the audiences. People should acknowledge this piece, by recognizing the sexualization and materialization of the female body through the male perspective that has been performed in this work. I hope this article would allow space for people to reflect and realize the issues!

The sources that you used in this article are reliable sources that have provided a lot of useful information and details on the artwork. I especially think the different narratives and portrayal of the piece from different people is extremely important, as well as how this piece is seen throughout time. You have gathered them together and written this in-depth description and introduction to the piece. I am looking forward to seeing how this article would unfold!

Here are some of my thoughts and suggestions, feel free to disregard them:

-Lead is clear, introducing the definition of performance art with one sentence, as well as including a section of "examples of females artists using their bodies" which has worked as the basic description of the topic. The content is also very well written with a neutral tone and a lot of information from references, not using current articles but it is because the piece was created in an earlier period.

-Existing article has very little history about performance art, which might be a great thing to consider adding onto more. Maybe just simply adding some more background on the topic would be helpful for people to understand.

-Is there any more review or discussion on the piece in a more contemporary time? How the piece is seen throughout time changes? How are the critiques different based on the period of time? How are people from different places see the work, is there any controversial argument towards the piece, and how does that has been reflected based on the time?

-How does feminist performance art change over time? What are the beliefs and ideas that performance artists are communicating? How does feminist performance art has a significant impact on the art world, or generally in the world or society? Is there a specific form of performance art that the feminist artists are working with or practicing through their piece?

-Maybe adding a brief background on the artist herself, as well as adding one or two sentences to simply mention the definition of male gaze might be helpful for readers who are not familiar with the topic or the artist.

-Considering the existing page on both Yoko Ono and Cut Piece, it might be an option to add your section to the Cut Piece page as well? (I am not sure but just wondering where to put the article would be the best option.)

-The article has been focusing on mainly gender violence, which is a critical point for the idea of the piece itself. Will there be any more pieces that you will write about, other feminist performance artists in Japan or other artists from other places?