User:Rebecca.Clark126/Last Mountain Lake National Wildlife Area/TobiTimothee Peer Review

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 * Whose work are you reviewing

Rebecca.clark/last mountain lake national wildlife area / group


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Evaluate the drafted changes
Overall: good job guys!

the additions to the article are very strong]

It seems that for every citation it had an error code in the reference sheet stating that none of them contained titles- I think this may be a glitch on your article as it says this for all of them. but I was able to use all thew cites so I don't know why it contains and error code.

the lead that was kept/modifyed from the original article is a great intro

the article had good flow from one topic to another - however the land use article seems a bit awkward in its place, maybe if it was grouped with the recreations portion or if more was added to the paragraph it would not stand out.

for the climate sections it is a little confusing when the months and different season are mentioned. For someone with no grasp of the general weather in Canada it might be misleading as to when these are occurring. (ex. a person in Australia might be rather confused or leave with the wrong idea for when the seasons occur)

maybe also adding in a section about the invasive species that the NWA is facing (I found this in your second citation) could also be a helpful addition

In the final list of activities one simply says "non-commercial berry" I think it is supposed to be followed with a picking at the end

the article has defiantly been improved from the original, the additions add richness to the content some minor editing needs to be done( such as capitols/commas) but overall lovely job guys I learned about a new place!