User:Rebeccaf1995/sandbox

Peer Review by Joan [edit]
Rebbeca I think you did a good job on the draft edit article.

When you say "The role of women in derby parody "hegemonic scripts of sexuality" through the use of costumes, derby names and personas" maybe expand on that and talk about how their costumes do mock the hegemonic sexuality of females. And what are some examples of these names you mention. Also put a period before every citation. Maybe when you talk about Egypt, maybe talk about other countries oppose to Egypt (ie. as opposed to the U.S Roller Derby ...... ).

The peer review bellow also makes some good points about adding a new section!

Good job! ~

Peer Review by Esme[edit]
Hi Rebecca,

This is a peer review on the section in your sandbox, "Roller Derby As A Political Act:"

I like what you included about derby in Egypt, and your explanation of the ways participating creates a political statement. You then go on to talk about derby creating a queer space, and I think there is room to elaborate on this: perhaps gender politics deserves it's own section? Based on what you have written, you could include what you have written from "Roller derby also acts as a queerspace..." to "Mainstream frameworks of female sports and teams highly objectify them for the male gaze while ignoring their individual sexualities [4]" Everything in between seems like it would fit nicely under the subheading of "gender politics and derby"

You might also consider creating a new section titled something like Gender and Athleticism, where you could put "Female athletes in the public eye are highly sexualized with their bodies reduced to objects. With female athletes in particular, there is a lack of focus on their athletic ability and a greater focus on their appearance and femininity (or lack thereof). Masculine bodies are the standard when it comes to athleticism and female bodies are constantly compared against this image. Roller derby turns this idea on its head by reclaiming sexualities and disregarding gender roles and norms. As stated by feminist scholar, V.A. Brownsworth in, Bigotry on The Home Team, Lesbians Face Harsh Penalties in the Sports World, "Sports are masculine; therefore, women in sports are masculine; therefore, women in sports are lesbian."[5] Derby girls change the way we view athleticism in women by claiming agency over their own hyper-sexualization to resist patriarchal standards.[6"

Hope this helps. Happy editing. Esmearielfemsub (talk) 22:48, 19 April 2018 (UTC) esme 4/19

Roller Derby as a Political Act
Roller derby is inherently a political act because of its ability to create spaces that defy heteronormativity and patriarchal standards. For example, in Egypt's society, there are certain expectation of women to not show visible scars, to have an unblemished body for her husband and to refrain from activity that may damage her body. Because of this, roller derby in Egypt is subversive: it acts as a political statement without directly addressing it. Roller derby also acts as a queer space that creates a unique stage for female athletes. Skaters enact sexualities that act as a creation of identity and a reclamation of identity. The role of women in derby parody "hegemonic scripts of sexuality" through the use of costumes, derby names and personas. Derby allows women to create commentary on the societal constraints placed on women and female athletes. Mainstream frameworks of female sports and teams highly objectify them for the male gaze while ignoring their individual sexualities. Female athletes in the public eye are highly sexualized with their bodies reduced to objects. With female athletes in particular, there is a lack of focus on their athletic ability and a greater focus on their appearance and femininity (or lack thereof). Masculine bodies are the standard when it comes to athleticism and female bodies are constantly compared against this image. Roller derby turns this idea on its head by reclaiming sexualities and disregarding gender roles and norms. As stated by feminist scholar, V.A. Brownsworth in, Bigotry on The Home Team, Lesbians Face Harsh Penalties in the Sports World, "Sports are masculine; therefore, women in sports are masculine; therefore, women in sports are lesbian." Derby girls change the way we view athleticism in women by claiming agency over their own hyper-sexualization to resist patriarchal standards. Rebeccaf1995 (talk) 19:46, 19 April 2018 (UTC)