User:Rebekah.a.epps/Military sexual trauma/Breahmckay Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Rebekah.a.epp


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Rebekah.a.epps/Military sexual trauma
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Military sexual trauma

Evaluate the drafted changes
Your lead sentence is very precise and states the topic in one sentence. I can tell that it supports the changes you have made compared to the previous article. The lead section is nice and concise and easy to understand what will be discussed in the next sections.

I liked how you included the culture behind MST and placed it after the lead sections so readers who haven't learnt about the subject (like me) can get a better understanding of the problem. I didn't come across any grammatical errors and I think you have organized your content well with the information flowing after each section.

For your next step, I think it would be good to add some visuals or pictures with statistics of some sort to support your information.

The other article does go more in depth but I really like what you have added and it does add to the article well.