User:Rebekah Greenwood/Passerini reaction/Chlorinetwist Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Sheryl Munshan, Sganz3, Rebekah Greenwood


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Rebekah Greenwood/Passerini reaction
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Passerini reaction
 * Passerini reaction

Lead

 * great improvement on the lead section!
 * lead gives a great overview of the reaction and what is included in the article; backed up by sources
 * has been updated to give overview of new content that group added to article
 * concise
 * mention of DESs might be too detailed; not really built upon later in the article
 * "ionic liquids such as water" should probably be "polar solvents such as water" since water is not an ionic liquid

Content

 * edited "Reaction Mechanism" section to be more detailed
 * mechanism images look much clearer
 * unsure if "Reaction Control" needs to be a main section - it's also not mentioned in the lead section
 * group created new "Applications" section; great addition
 * I like how they included a wide range of subheadings under this section; makes it feel complete
 * used a lot of good sources

Tone and Balanced

 * article has a neutral tone
 * overall good balance between mechanism section and applications section
 * "Reaction Control" section is a little underdeveloped (but I know this is just a draft)

Organization

 * very well-organized and article has a logical flow
 * everything is well-written and easy to understand; no unclear sentences or paragraphs
 * images are great (not pixelated, good size)

Overall impressions

 * The group improved the article significantly
 * Lead and mechanism sections are much better; applications are a great addition
 * Article feels complete
 * I'm just not sure if the "Reaction Control" section is really necessary; it felt a little out of place
 * great job!! (also this reaction was really cool to learn about! good choice for editing!)