User:Rebekahfrese/Economic abuse/Gingersauce Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Rebekah Frese


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://dashboard.wikiedu.org/courses/The_George_Washington_University/Women_Welfare_and_Poverty_(Fall_2021)/students/articles/Gingersauce?showArticle=51507543


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

The lead is brief, but clearly demonstrates the content of the article in summary form. The definitions are clear and easy to understand. The table of contents immediately following the lead is short - there are a number of categories within economic abuse that could easily be added or expanded upon.

Under the section "Role in Domestic Violence," there are several grammatical errors in the bullet point list due to changing verb tenses. All verb tenses should be the same.

Under the section "Controlling Mechanism," the third sentence should read that the victim has limited ability to leave, rather than the 'offender.'

I appreciate the statistics included under the section "Job Related Impacts" as evidence supporting the topic.

In the section "Impact of Lack of Economic Resources," I recommend using a more gender-neutral term than 'he or she.' Perhaps individuals, survivors, victims, etc. There are more genders experiencing abuse than solely males and females.

In the section "Role in Elder Abuse," there is a bullet point missing any content!

The content is definitely relevant to the topic. Under the "Laws" section, I recommend drawing more references to how laws vary state by state or building out the section describing the United States more.

There are 8 references so far, from a variety of sources and a variety of publication years. So far, this content does seem well-supported.

Despite having various minor grammatical issues, the content is laid out clearly and concisely - it makes sense and is well-organized.

There are no images added at this point in time to comment upon.

My overall impression is that this is a great start! I am excited to see it develop more =)