User:Red027/Acute stress disorder/VerdantAurum Peer Review

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VerdantAurum's Acute stress disorder Article Peer Review[edit]
Good Evening Red027! Firstly, I would like to commend you for choosing such an important topic such as you did. I like that you included a "Notes" section in your sandbox to organise your thoughts and remind yourself what needs work in your article. Personally, I think this is a very good idea. You could possibly consider dating when you make new contributions to your draft to keep even better track of how your article is progressing. Your intended contributions to the article appear to be clearly stated and without bias. They also include relevant information to the subject that is not clearly stated in the article originally. I think these will add to the article well. However, I must agree with Liz that you need to bring over more of the original article into your sandbox. While your contributions certainly look good, just from reading them and the article separately, it's difficult to determine where exactly you intend to place your contributions. This means that there's no real way to gauge if your contributions will affect the tone or flow of the article.

VerdantAurum (talk) 04:18, 1 March 2021 (UTC)

Hello. Thank you for reviewing my article. I have brought over parts of the article that my contributions will go into. I have also bolded my edits. Tone and flow have been difficult to figure out. I am used to writing in my own voice and not contributing to a work edited by so many people. I hope the sections of the article I added give context. Thanks again. - Spencer