User:RedCellar/Evaluate an Article

Which article are you evaluating?
(Common goldfish)

Why you have chosen this article to evaluate?
(I was obsessed with pet fish care, and one of the fishes I loved to learn about was pet goldfish, so I thought it would be interesting to evaluate this article.)

Evaluate the article
The entire article seems to be directed towards how to care for a common goldfish. I think that the article needs to also be directed at pure facts about the goldfish for people who are simply just interested in learning about the fish breed.

The lead is concise in saying the basic facts of the goldfish, but does not include what the rest of the article's main points are about. The lead talks about the colors of the goldfish, but does not go into detail in that information in the rest of the article. I don't think that the lead is detailed enough; I think it needs a few more sentences to drive the point of what the article is about.

In the temperament section: "They are able to coexist with any fish, providing they're tame and sociable" I think that this sentence can be rewritten clearer. The entire temperament section does not have any sources, and needs them.

The third paragraph in the housing section needs to be more detailed. It talks about goldfish being aggressive and sometimes cannibalistic and has no citations. There needs to be more information about goldfish and being aggressive.

"Basic Common Goldfish Care" also does not have any citations. I think that the section could be improves with bullet points instead of paragraphs.

The disease section is well written. There's citations, and each disease has its own paragraph and detailed information about the disease, as well as treatment.

The three other sections (lifespan, as feeder fish, and confusions with comet goldfish) are very short and need to be much more detailed. I think that the "confusions with comet goldfish" section does not need to have it's own huge section, rather it can be included with another section, such as a section dedicated to the common goldfish and it's other common fish breeds.

There are only a total of 10 references. I believe there should be more than that. All of the links do work.

I would not say that the tone of the article is neutral. It seems to take on the perspective that people need to care more for their common goldfish (which is true, but is not relevant when writing this article). They could have included common goldfish care for one of the sections, but not the entire article.

Not all of the facts are backed up by articles. Much of the article seems to just be an info dump from somebody who knows a lot about taking care of goldfish.

The pictures in the article are relevant to the topics, but there should definitely be more pictures added. Pictures of the diseases would be helpful. A picture of a comet goldfish in comparison would be helpful. A picture of an old fish in the lifespan section would be helpful. I think that the captions under the pictures are well done.

There are no grammatical or spelling errors.

The article is strong in the disease section, and in showing how to care for a pet goldfish in a tank. The article is weak in saying facts about the goldfish. I think in total, the article is underdeveloped.