User:RedEpsilon117/Battle of Resaca de la Palma/AJF1403 Peer Review

General info
(RedEpsilon117)
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:RedEpsilon117/Battle of Resaca de la Palma
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Battle of Resaca de la Palma

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead: It seems that the sections being changed are the Aftermath section and the Battle section so the lead has not changed.

Content: The new content that was added does seem relevant to the topic. It does feel like the content added belongs where it was put. Great job at providing details to explain the subject that is not only informational but also flows nicely from start to finish of each paragraph. Also a good job at making changes needed in existing paragraphs that do not feel out of place. If I had to say anything about the content that could be changed or just looked at it would be the possibility of adding a comma where it could help a sentence or just restructuring the sentence to make it a bit shorter because there are some long sentences.

Tone and Balance: The changes overall do not come off as biased or in favor of one side/perspective. The points in the article where the word "important" or importance come about or anytime success is talked about, can be seen as bias if not conventionally noticed as important or successful. It doesn't read biased ,but just be mindful of that. The same goes with negative connotations as well.

Sources and References: The sources used are all integrated within the text in an appropriate manner. Nothing seems out of place. The sources used are good sources that are relevant to the material and do add to the article. The references are present at the bottom and there seems to be nothing wrong with those as the links do work.

Organization: I already mentioned about the commas so there is that, but again if you feel it is necessary or not. The organization is precise with the places that the paragraphs start and end. The sections that are done and will be done are needed to explain the event. It is an article that is easy to read and includes details and explanations that are clear.

Images/media: No images yet but that can be added pretty easily before the changes are finished.

Overall Impressions: The article itself is a good article to work on because it is an interesting topic and has room to grow which the changes made have expanded on in a great way. The changes that were made are very informative and makes the article more detailed in important aspects of the event. Overall improvements to make are very slim and could or could not be added and it would still be fine, like the longer sentences and the possible bias in certain word choices.