User:RedEpsilon117/Battle of Resaca de la Palma/Ehail773 Peer Review

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Content- I thought you did a great job of weaving in your new information and dialogue into the preexisting "Aftermath Section". The two facts at the end of your writing seem out of place but I am pretty sure you're waiting to use those in your battle section. I also think maybe adding in a little more background on General Arista in your third paragraph could benefit your writing. Overall I think you have some really good sources for the "Aftermath Section", keep it going.

Tone- I think you had great balance talking about both General Arista and Taylor towards the end of your wiring, pointing out that they were both recognized for how they both treated the enemy soldiers. Once you start going into the battles part of your writing keep that same balance, especially when writing about a war or battle it can be easy to write more about one side than the other.

Organization- One thing that stood out to me was your last sentence in paragraph two about the different types of shots used by American gunners that were used on the battlefield. Maybe talk a little bit about the Mexican tactics, and why they didn't have the same firepower as the U.S in battle.

No images yet, but definitely find one of General Arista and Taylor, maybe for paragraph two a picture of a gun used by the American Army. I think you can add a lot of pictures because you have so much depth in your writing.

Overall I think this is a Great Start, you have a knack for research and finding great facts and fitting them in your writing. Work on adding a little more background to important people in your writing like General Taylor and Arisa, and find a way to weave your two location facts at the end better into your writing.