User:Redalligator3/Oneota/Kaden15436 Peer Review

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Redalligator3
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Redalligator3/Oneota
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Oneota

Evaluate the drafted changes
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 * 1) It significantly improves on the limited information in the original article, including new subheadings for heath, different important sites, social structures, agriculture and such. It also uses significantly more sources than the original. I'm impressed by the amount of info added.
 * 2) I would look at the sources and make sure they are added after each sentence or two that were taken from a source instead of adding at the end of a paragraph. The lead could be a little more filled out and have a little more of a summary of the people.
 * 3) I think it is a great start adding much more than the original article, maybe they could add a little more to under the lifestyle subsections. Also maybe having an image or map or something of the sort, I don't think it is 100% necessary but would be cool. Also, I mention this a little earlier about making sure everything added was sourced.
 * 4) Maybe adding a little more about culture and lifestyle would be helpful.