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Murder of Anni Dewani Suggested Changes
I would change this >>In his plea bargain agreement, Zola Tongo stated that Anni's husband, British national Shrien Dewani of Bristol, had offered R15,000 to have his wife killed.<< to "Zola Tongo alleged that Anni's husband had offered R15,000 to have his wife killed."

Then >>Following an application by South African authorities, Senior District Judge Howard Riddle ruled in August 2011 that Shrien Dewani could be extradited to face charges in relation to the murder.<< To "Following an application by South African authorities, Senior District Judge Howard Riddle ruled in August 2011 that Dewani could be extradited to face charges in relation to the murder." because while it keeps the surname of the husband in the text, it reduces his identifiability and may go some way to easing BLP concerns. For the same reason, I would remove the first name wherever possible in the article.

I would remove this paragraph >>Following a long legal battle, in January 2014, the English High Court of Justice rejected Shrien Dewani's plea against extradition to South Africa,[13] and he was extradited to South Africa on 7 April 2014 and taken to court on 8 April 2014.[14] The cost of the extradition to British taxpayers was £250,000.[15]<< from the lede.

Reading the background section on Shrien Dewani, I can understand why it might raise BLP concerns. Would there be anyway of reducing the information.

I would remove this sentence >>He then challenged Shrien to return to South Africa, commenting that South African police should not rule anyone out of the investigation.<< from the investigation section.

I would remove the "Inconsistencies in Shrien Dewani's version of events" section and the Max Clifford section immediately beneath it.

I would change >>Monde Mbolombo was granted full immunity from prosecution, in exchange for his truthful testimony against Shrien Dewani. This plea deal was granted in accordance with Section 204 of the Criminal Procedure Act.<< To "Monde Mbolombo was granted full immunity from prosecution, in exchange for his testimony against Shrien Dewani. This plea deal was granted in accordance with Section 204 of the Criminal Procedure Act."

I think the extradition section needs a re-write.

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Palmares
Red Fiona (talk) 16:33, 21 May 2015 (UTC)

Palmares

 * 2006
 * 2nd African Cycling Championships (Port Louis) I.T.T.
 * 2nd GP Demy-Cars


 * 2007
 * 2nd National Championships Namibia I.T.T.
 * 3rd GP Folignano
 * 2nd Giro Valli Aretine – GP Citta di Arezzo


 * 2008
 * 1st African Cycling Championships (Casablanca)
 * 3rd African Cycling Championships (Casablanca) I.T.T.
 * 2nd Trofeo Salvatore Morucci
 * 3rd Giro del Cigno
 * 3rd GP Inda – Trofeo Aras Frattini
 * 1st GP Cristal Energie


 * 2009
 * 1st UCI Africa Tour
 * 2nd Shay Elliott Memorial Race


 * 2010
 * 2nd East Midlands Classic
 * 1st Chas Messenger Road Race
 * 1st Shay Elliott Memorial Race
 * 3rd Overall FBD Insurance Rás
 * 1st Stage 1
 * 1st Stage 4 Tour of Rwanda
 * 1st Clayton Velo Spring Classic


 * 2011
 * 5th Overall Vuelta a Leon
 * 1st Stage 3
 * 7th Overall La Tropicale Amissa Bongo
 * 1st Mountains classification
 * 8th Ronde de l'Oise


 * 2013
 * 2nd African Road Race Championships


 * 2014
 * 1st Overall Tour du Cameroun
 * 1st Mountains classification
 * 5th Overall Tour du Maroc
 * 9th Commonwealth Games road race


 * 2015
 * 1st MaillotNamibiaChampion.png Namibian Road Race Championships
 * 4th Overall La Tropicale Amissa Bongo

2016
 * 1st MaillotNamibiaChampion.png Namibian Road Race Championships
 * 4th Overall La Tropicale Amissa Bongo

2017
 * 1st MaillotNamibiaChampion.png Namibian Road Race Championships
 * 4th Overall La Tropicale Amissa Bongo

2018
 * 1st MaillotNamibiaChampion.png Namibian Road Race Championships
 * 4th Overall La Tropicale Amissa Bongo

2019
 * 1st MaillotNamibiaChampion.png Namibian Road Race Championships
 * 4th Overall La Tropicale Amissa Bongo

Journal Cite test
Want to see which visual editor citation tool works best for a jounral article. Don't mind me.

Boxing tables

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