User:Redpandafan/Janet Vertesi/Casademasa Peer Review

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Peer Review Week 7 Janet Vertesi

Hello, redpandafan!

Great start to your article. I had never heard of Vertesi's work before and you do a good job of summarizing the body of her research and subject interests. The lead is a good start, but I think it might include a lot of detail that could be devoted to separate sections. For example, you might just simply state her educational background and research interests to give the reader a sense of her work before diving into specific details. I notice in other biographical wiki articles that there tends to be a separate section for works published, awards and accolades, and specific projects. This is all mentioned in the lead, so you might consider making it more concise. I would definitely suggest looking at other well-developed wiki articles for reference, as this helped me a lot when working on my article.

For the body of the article, I noticed you do not have any citations or links to other articles. In future drafts, you will want to add this. I think you might want to add other dimensions to make the article more developed. Most of the article is devoted to summarizing her research, it might be beneficial to include some early life and biographical information to start. You could also add how academia has engaged with her work or how her research has been impactful. This could be its own section to demonstrate the relevance of the article. Also, I did not see a clear connection to the topic of privacy so you might want to clarify that. I cannot see your sources but since you reference Vertesi's work a lot I am assuming she is your primary author. You might want to add sources by other authors and more diverse secondary sources.

Overall, the article was very well written and easy to follow. You do a good job summarizing Vertesi's body of work.