User:Redpoppys/Environmental impacts of electronic cigarettes/Westin.boyd Peer Review

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(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead

The lead should be the "Use of Disposable Vapes" section, it's perfect! It does need to sound a little more encyclopedic, though: it very much sounds like the introduction to an academic essay at the moment. The best way I can phrase it is make it about the facts -- introduce the facts you are about to discuss -- rather than introducing the concept as a whole. Also, the tone of the lead needs to be altered slightly: write about the concept of e-cigarettes as if you were viewing society like a movie, from an outsider perspective. Phrases like "the immediate satisfaction they provide" and "catering to both novice and experienced users" should be made less individual and insider and more societal and outward. The section also needs a stronger introductory sentence that briefly explains what e-cigarettes are before quickly jumping into the fact that they have environmental impacts. I also recommend that you include your article's title in this sentence and make it bold.

Content

The content of the article is perfect! You might want to consider examining the impact of vapes worldwide, or explaining in which areas of the world it's more prevalent. If you can't find any information relating to this, state that and possible reasons for it in the article.

Tone and Balance

Aside from the lead (see above), the tone is spot on! The article sticks clearly to the facts and discusses the issue from a societal perspective.

You may want to consider adding evidence that suggests that vaping has little to no effect on the environment? Just so all viewpoints have been considered to ensure your content remains neutral.

Sources and References

Perfect balance! More wouldn't hurt, of course, but that will always be the case. The lead needs more sources, too. Most of that information is not common knowledge and cannot be discerned from the information in the article.

Organization

Wonderful! Once you pull the lead out, the section about the components of electronic cigarettes should become its own section.

Images and Media

You don't have any, but honestly, I'm not sure what you would add at this point. If you find a cool graphic in one of your articles, that would work. Maybe a picture of electronic cigarettes by the leads? Oh, also, a picture of discarded vapes in nature or a landfill that clearly show its harm?

For New Articles

For the most part, all looks good! Consider adding links to other articles, too, especially those that relate to your topic.

Overall Impressions

I love this article! It's organized, encyclopedic, and informative! Some work needs to be done with the lead and a more definitive introductory sentence needs to be added. More content about counterevidence or aspects of the environmental impacts in other parts of the world would really benefit the article as well. See if you can add more sources and some media too. Overall, fantastic job!